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There's a new Eien no Filena translation - [Mar. 24th, 2006|06:40 pm]
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And I shall ramble away -

Paused after the Balabas fight.


General notes about style:
- Text over runs the screen on the f of 'of' just before Master Zenna mentions where her room is and to rest well.

- I'm not sure if chests have been translated yet, but the chest in the Zenna's room has a garbled text. I believe it's 'it's locked.' The post battle text for the honeybee fight is not translated on the chest either.

- The graphic of the honeybee that Zenna makes you fight is glitched. That's more than likely my emulator.

- Filena's level up text has the "l" very blurred into the e. It looks fine with, for example, the Flying Ripper. The "u" to b thing on Double Thrust also has a similar closeness. I suspect that's the font more than anything else. ( 'm' to b on Balabas' "My Crystal Axe will tear you limb to limb" in the battle text also has that close spacing thing.) All of these are still quite readable.

- Minor grammar quibble - The "I will always be waiting for you here, Filena" line by Lila (when she's waiting back in Filena's house) sounds a tiny bit clunky. I think it's that the "here" sounds like it's dangling at the end of the sentence. Since I've got no clue if that phrase is important, it's hard to quibble one way or the other. I do wonder if "I will always be waiting here, Filena" might work, but that loses the 'for you' part of the phrase.

- Line length - Nest's line "What the hell were you investigating" after the Information center may not need a return before the you. That's an esthetics quibble, really.

- Untranslated text after the blinding scene when you're in what I assume is the Black Devil headquarters. It's the entire scene.

- Consistancy quibble - The Barabba 4 in the burning battle school may use a different version of the "nameless and known to none" line, but I had the text speed up a bit high to say for certain.

Mindless squeeing and rambling:
- It's nifty to see what he's actually saying in the first battle. The younger Filena sprite is also rather cute, now that I'm trying to notice things.

- I wonder if the prisoners in the dungeon are the same Blond Brigade that show up in the ending.

- Really subtle, Filena, with the flowers in your room.

- The rector has bright pink hair. Or hat.

- The townspeople text seems a lot more rounded and characterized (at the start of the game, most of them hate Filena, but it's well written.) Zenna sounds rather generic next to that. Then again, I think that's just due to the fact that Zenna's not exactly got a lot of dialogue yet, and he seems to mostly be big and strong and drill sargant like.

- I like Nest. Nifty guy. (Though it's still a mystery why he likes hammers so much.)
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[User Picture]From: satsu
2006-03-25 04:26 am (UTC)
Text overflow: Oops. That'll teach me to guesstimate line lengths.
Chests: The text wasn't in the dialogue files. I just had a look and it turned out to be floating around the ROM, so I've just translated them. (I saw two strings: "It's locked" and "It's empty".)
Honeybee: Never saw a problem before, but I haven't double checked.

Prisoners: Yep, the Blond Brigade is probably the Clechia Rebel Force. I think everyone in the game who is blond is a Clechia.

Keep me posted! :)
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[User Picture]From: corvid
2006-03-25 04:59 am (UTC)
On the honey bee, I'm pretty certain it's the emulator. I'm running an out of date one that gets cranky about overlapping sprites sometimes. I'm using SNES9X, if you're worried about testing it, and I can pretty easily get you a freeze before the fight.

That sounds perfectly logical considering that it looks like he opens the chest to let out the bee, and afterwards, it'd be empty.

All I noticed was suddenly near the end of the game, there was a horde of many many blond men running about. Which had me very confused. A rebel force makes perfect sense.
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[User Picture]From: satsu
2006-03-28 08:46 pm (UTC)
- Minor grammar quibble - The "I will always be waiting for you here, Filena" line by Lila (when she's waiting back in Filena's house) sounds a tiny bit clunky. I think it's that the "here" sounds like it's dangling at the end of the sentence. Since I've got no clue if that phrase is important, it's hard to quibble one way or the other. I do wonder if "I will always be waiting here, Filena" might work, but that loses the 'for you' part of the phrase.

This is characteristic of my sloppy writing style. :(
"I'll always be waiting here for you, Filena" should be a better alternative, I think. It's not an important line by any means, though.

- Line length - Nest's line "What the hell were you investigating" after the Information center may not need a return before the you. That's an esthetics quibble, really.

Sounds like another sad case of me guesstimating line lengths. :(

- Consistancy quibble - The Barabba 4 in the burning battle school may use a different version of the "nameless and known to none" line, but I had the text speed up a bit high to say for certain.

Yeah, they do change it around a bit in the original text.
Also, I think the Black Devils are referred to Barabba x in dialogue and Balaba x in battle, which needs to be fixed. @_@

- The townspeople text seems a lot more rounded and characterized (at the start of the game, most of them hate Filena, but it's well written.) Zenna sounds rather generic next to that. Then again, I think that's just due to the fact that Zenna's not exactly got a lot of dialogue yet, and he seems to mostly be big and strong and drill sargant like.

Zenna doesn't really say much that I recall. He's pretty much a loyal retainer to the kingdom whose only concern is ensuring Filena's survival and restoration of Filosera, hence the brutal training.
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[User Picture]From: corvid
2006-03-29 12:17 am (UTC)
Another Barabba problem. 4 talks about 6's failure and thus doing an explosion at the school. Is he talking about 2 at the Info Center? Or another one?
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[User Picture]From: satsu
2006-03-29 02:55 pm (UTC)
I think he's talking about the one that Nest shot.
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